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Unread May 3rd, 2006, 07:06 PM   #1
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Redliners D=

Im doing a gift for a friend of mine and i want to do it well for her. Her favorite animal is the north american mountain lion. Would someone mind redlining my errors in these sketches? Be as harsh as you would like. Her birthday is coming up really soon i would like to finish this as soon as possible XP

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Unread May 4th, 2006, 07:43 AM   #2
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About the body picture;

1. Why does his back slope down like that towards his butt? Shoulders and butt tend to be on same level when standing on flat ground as he appears to be.

2. He needs a longer middle (belly/back).

3. Perhaps the shoulders are too fat?

And about the headshot, the nose looks kinda pointy, almost like a wolf; perhaps make the face a bit more rounded and catlike.
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Unread May 4th, 2006, 02:05 PM   #3
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Lol im not sure why i drew his rear like that. I was hoping to be going for some sort of slinky-sneeky appearance.

Thank you very much Pinali for taking the time to redline this for me. =)
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Unread May 8th, 2006, 05:23 PM   #4
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update!

Everyone says he looks a little worried. I tried moveing the eyebrow this way and that but he still looks a little agitated.Can anyone suggest something?
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Unread May 9th, 2006, 03:02 AM   #5
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Try tilting the eye itself counterclockwise a little.
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