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Unread Oct 10th, 2004, 05:30 PM   #1
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Somethings not happening.

Aside from running out of space on the paper, this drawing realy went down the tubes for some critical errors I cant quite put my finger on. [attach 1] I had drawn a female figure quite well enough before![attach 2]

Comments, suggestions, and especally reference pictures would be much appreciated.
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Unread Oct 10th, 2004, 05:50 PM   #2
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Hm... I think it might be because you haven't drawn in the breasts, so the hips look a little too wide for the body. >> The waist is too shallow, too, I think.

I attached a redline for ya, because it's hard for me to explain what I see. XD;; The blue lines are more anatomical details. Hope it helps a little. ^^;
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Unread Oct 11th, 2004, 11:06 AM   #3
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Thats quite helpfull, thanks. Uh, maybe I should lighten up on lines too huh?
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The lines are fine. ^^ Actually, a little tip: when you sketch, sketch as light as possible, so when you make a mistake, it's easy to erase. You can always go back and make the lines darker.

Glad I could help some.
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Unread Oct 12th, 2004, 09:09 AM   #5
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Glad you did help some, thanks!
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Unread Oct 12th, 2004, 07:51 PM   #6
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You seem to have made it look like her hip bones are in her thighs, which is really throwing off the bottom half of her body. Remember to think about how the body actually works when you're drawing, instead of just thinking of how it's shaped, if that makes sense. Elbereth corrected this pretty well in her red-line, but I've never met a girl with such a wide space between the thighs. If you make her inner thighs rounded out convexley(is that a word?), I think it'll work a little better.

Just a little detail I noticed that's easily fixed.
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I gave it a shot, try to keep the hips the widest point of the body, or equal to the shoulders. Think hour glass, and voluptous round shapes make the softest females. This is just a rough sketch, so exact accuracy is in question, but you get the idea.
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